Daddy's rage

Wow hun. Powerful. 5/5 The flow was nice and good job on the rhyming. You are a very good writer. Keep it up hun.

I've only read two other poems but I should say this is by far the best you’ve written. The poem holds a sadistic story and is explored well through a number of poetic techniques. The imagery helps convey the little girl's fear and inability to help herself. Just a suggestion for improvement:

"A box or a cage" - you could change that to:
"A God forsaken cage". I think it adds to the power of the story and elaborates the little girl's emotions a lot more.

Very well done :).

Wow, this was intense. Excellent flow and structure, however; I felt this poem would be much stronger with puncuation. Overall good job.

In the first line, "Its" should be "It's"

First line second stanza and second line fifth stanza, "alchohal" should be, "alcohol"

Third line second stanza, "shes" should be, "she's"

Seventh stanza last line and the ninth stanza third line, "through" should be, "threw"

Tenth stanza first line, "chil" should be, "chill"

Peace, Joe

So sad.
I can relate to this one, as well.
It was a great poem, brought back memories and feelings, eh.

Keep up the great work.
I'm going to add you to my favorites. :D

5/5

Wow ... WOW is the only word to desrid your wirting