Hmm... I did see the topic change, but only because I knew to look for it. The rhyme in this piece is very good. It does not seem at all forced, a trait that I like. However your first line to this poem threw me a little. It was long, and to be quite honest, clumsy. I like the idea and concept for that line. But I think that you need to shorten it or re-word it differently. Just an opinion however. Other than that I did like this piece a lot. *4/5

I can call this one of the greatest poem with a true meanings behind it,
it is so true yet "life happens deal with it"
beside the great meaning of the poem, I also love the style you used in this poem, specially the rhyme was one of the greatest that flow greatly.
keep up the great job as you are really talented writer. a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.