You've got a great connection between your feelings and your metaphoric expressions. You touched on expressing anger vs. forgiveness. Which do you think is more thought provoking and delivers more impact?

I love this poem! so much emotion...there's just something about it that pulls me into it, sends shivers down my spine [ i guess 'cause i can relate to it so much]

wonderful job!!

5/5

The metaphor was great really capturing and caught the eye. I found this to hold so much emotion which was expressed greatly. Good effort on this well done on this poem~mel

This is superb. I like your wordings and you have just chosen the appropriate words. Your descriptions are beautiful and the flow is also nice. Keep up the good work

I'll be glad to hear this :) if you ever record it xD I love the title hihi and I like the emotions in it. Keep writing my friend.