Unfinished

Aw, sweet poem. I liked it. The flow was good and consistent throughout.

"But you never hurt me
You've never lied
You've seen my soul
All the tears that I've cried"

^ That stanza was so sweet. I really enjoyed it.

This is so sweet, it's really beautifull, the flow of it isn't perfect though, and i would work on that if i was you, but the rest is gorgeous
gabriella

Awe. This was really sweet. Very beautifully written. It flowed pretty well & nothing seemed too forced.

However, I will give my honest opinions & some suggestions.

"I love you!["]- the first thing you ever said to me
And yet I didn't believe
Thought it [was] too good to be true

^ I really loved the first line of this.. So beautiful. You do need another set of quotation marks after the exclamation mark, though. and on the last line.. should be a 'was' after the word 'it'.

I trust you
And only you
You've [You*] don't understand
How much I truly love you

^ 'You've' should just be 'You' in this stanza. Frankly, in my opinion, I think the word 'you' was used wayy too much in this stanza.. It kind of crashes the poem.

I've opened myself up
Only to you
I don't know what I'd do without you [,] I'd be truly lost.

^ In this stanza..In the last line should be a comma [,] after 'you'

But I do think that that line is a bit too long. Maybe try to shorten it up a bit. :]

I still like it though.

Overall rating : 4/5

Bri [x]

Awww thats ace ... its beautiful well done i really like it a lot xxx

I liked the feeling inside this,beatifully written and i liked the flow
Keep it up
LAURA