Your opening lines caught my attention almost immediately. & so I continued to read.

yet, the further I got along, I felt the flow kind of drift off, then get back on, drift off & then get back on.

There were also a few grammatical errors, like an apostrophe in I'd.

When I got near the end of the poem, I got a little tense though, it was nerveracking & the ending was superb.

other than a few flow issues & the grammar, this was a very enjoyed poem. great job.!

[& since gave you constructive criticism, which i know is hard to take sometimes -believe me i know- you have all rights to do it to one of my poems]

5/5