I like this poem. i love how you have it worded and how the rhythm is. its really beautiful and sounds like its about you or someone you know. i sounds like you have felt this pain, like you are the one that wants to be loved. the flow of this poem was so amazing. you have everything worded to right. i love it, absolutely love it.

Wow great poem 5/5 keep it up.

Really good poem, great rhythm. I lioved how it ended and how its worded.
Oh yea loved this stanza....

"When all beauty is revealed
it doesn't change the healing of your heart
the flower will always die
and the petal will always wilt
but the Thorn will never fade
One thing she will not forget for all of her days"

Hey thanks returning the favour... i like this poem it's really good. it has a good flow and has a lot of emotion in it and it's really really sad. you are a great writer. suberb. 5/5 :):):):):)

The poem goes very deep! i loved every second i was reading it! the rythme is excellent and the use of words is perfect! 5/5! =)

I'm unsure with this one...the subject seems to switch half way through. It's called "the love thorn" yet the only refference to this idea seems to be at the end. The beginning few stanzas talk about the pain of love...but where does the thorn come in to it. I think that part is unclear.
One line in this poem really stood out to me, it was on my wave length,"her own gaze wanting your glare," that impressed me. The reason being it was subtly saying, she wanted you to look back at her, rather than being blatantly obvious. Sometimes it's more creative to say things like that, rather than in plain black and white.
Ok well thanks for sharing, try some more of those subtle descriptions.

Aww. It's so depressing. -sigh- I love depressing things. Lol. I'm not emo or anything, I just feel more myself when I can let my 'sadder' emotions come out.

There were just very small problems I found with it. It seemed as if it didn't flow very well. Don't try to force your rhymes, and it'll all just come out working beautifully.

But I did really like the way you set this up. Rhymes were forced, yes, but they were also unique. The thing with unique rhymes is that a lot of them get forced. The 'story' itself was rather well done. I loved how she was so sad in this. And how you used a rose as a metaphor to life. Very well written. It just needs a few things touched up here and there. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

This poem is really good, I love your choice in words and the way you worded it was great. i like the way it is easely picture and you must have went through this pain or been close to some one who did well written i enjoyed reading your writings.

This is absolutely amazing. you showed this to me on AIM about a week ago....I honestly can't pick out one section that is the boldest or best, because the entire thing is great. And it all blends together so beautifully, and is so well connected that when taken out of context, the lines will lose so much of their meaning.

Definitely a 5/5 from me. you know what I think about this.

Keep.
It.
Up.

Tripp

Wow.. I'm speechless. That was beautiful! It captivated me. The flow was amazingly good. Even if I had wanted to I don't think I could have stopped myself in the middle of reading that. I loved you choice of words. This was definetely one of the better poems I have read.

Keep writing!
Cayce

Great poem! It was long but you really kept the rhythm and the meaning go so it didn't get dull or overdone. I really enjoyed this poem, and I love the title!

~jas~

Hmmm...I kind've liked it...the flow wasn't the best for me...but I absolutely loved the ending and the idea behind it...sad and true...I think there is a mistake in the 4th stanza...*passed...but, I didn't understand that part, so I'm not sure...it could use a little work...but i still liked it....good job
Jonda Mullins

Wow, when i read this poem i fell into a trance. I love your use of grammer and fine vocabulary. I wonder who inspired you? It's very hard to only have just a "memory" of someone. Just let the past be the past and be reminded of all the things that can be in store for you in the future.