Lost = This Hurtful Feeling

by Avrii Monrielle   Feb 9, 2007


Locked inside myself
Trapped deep within
This empty noise just echoes
Repeating all my sins

Everywhere, the sound
Beats within my ears
Pulsating all around
But no one seems to hear

Silver icicles
Battering rooftops
Twilight shimmers
Bestowing night upon all

Lost in a forest of bewilderment
Can\'t find the path to hope
Forgetting myself somewhere out there
Cast into the deep unknown

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  • 17 years ago

    by Yuna

    I had great enjoyment reading this. It reminds me of myself at times. Thank-you for writing it.

  • 17 years ago

    by donk2ymouth

    I don't have a lot to say about this poem at the moment, it's cryptic and I couldn't understand it, but poetry is in the eye of the beholder, in your eyes, it might be as clear as glass. Anyway, it's a good poem, and I was just wondering about the rhyme scheme. Some of them rhyme, while others don't. Was this meant to happen? It doesn't really matter. Keep up the good work.

  • 17 years ago

    by MyDevotion

    I really enjoyed the dark rythme of it, Good job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Alicia

    Nice Imagery and Flow.
    5/5
    ~Alicia

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