I like alot of it except the end...
i give it a 5/5 still even though the end is a little messed... still i really like it///....

comment some of my poems some time...

Cute poem.. however the words are very simple.. and you dont really express you emotion.. you say your crying and sad but instead of saying you want to cry explain the actual feeling of it.. about the tears falling down your face and making you tremble.. idk lol.. something a little more descriptive to really bring life to the pome

Captalize the begining of every new line. :] Nice poem but the captalization well make your votes go down.

Sad, but also true. good poem

your servant:
david

Awww i like this very much and i think you did a wonderful job writing it, but i would fix the grammer in it. and i dont understand why there is such a low rate on this! i give you 5/5

~Kristina