I think that the idea is very interesting, I think the ending wrapped up suddenly, abruptly, it wasn't a smooth transition for me. I did like the poem, however, it was a simple and easily understood message, presented well.

Wow!
if this is a true story, i hope everything went out good betwen those 2/you 2! i like how there's that twist at the end...and a happy ending!!! just the right timing...