The Feeling is Love

by Yuna   Feb 13, 2007


Have you ever had a moment,
when your heart would skip a beat,
Your skin would sweat beads,
when the two of you meet?

you feel as if life is simply a dream,
because when your here with him
life is perfect it would seem.

you dream of him
when you sleep at night,
you feel empty without him
right by your side.

You wish that this feeling could last
for all time,
and that the love that you share,
would not be a crime.

Hold on to your lover,
until the time ends,
share your love with each other,
and always be friends!

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  • 15 years ago

    by Tsukuyomi

    Beautiful <3

  • 17 years ago

    by Hatori

    Yuna,
    I don't think that this is my favorite poem by you, but that doesn't mean that it's bad! It seemed (To me, at least) that some of the stanza's were awkward. For example, this one:

    You wish that this feeling could last
    for all time,
    and that the love that you share,
    would not be a crime.

    The first and second lines are so different in length and the first line seems to just suddenly end. I dunno if this will help your poem if you change this, but it's completely up to you. You're the poet.
    I hope that this helps!!! ^.-
    Keep it up, probably a 4.5/5

    With all due respect,
    Hatori

  • 17 years ago

    by Kevin Blighe

    Rockin'! Although, I'd be dreaming of a 'Her' not a 'Him' but anyway! ;)