Rockin'! Although, I'd be dreaming of a 'Her' not a 'Him' but anyway! ;)

Yuna,
I don't think that this is my favorite poem by you, but that doesn't mean that it's bad! It seemed (To me, at least) that some of the stanza's were awkward. For example, this one:

You wish that this feeling could last
for all time,
and that the love that you share,
would not be a crime.

The first and second lines are so different in length and the first line seems to just suddenly end. I dunno if this will help your poem if you change this, but it's completely up to you. You're the poet.
I hope that this helps!!! ^.-
Keep it up, probably a 4.5/5

With all due respect,
Hatori

Beautiful <3