Hm..
Hm.
I really liked it.. Until the end. The last two lines shot it down, for me. It gave away everything, where as the first stanza leaves you thinking and considering.
The flow was very touching; I usually dispise non-rhyming for I feel anyone can just put words down, but the way you wrote this and explained was very creative and well done. I must say good job.

xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

Ah, This is great as I have been there before.
Lurid tickles
of the red wine glass

OH!
My head does pound this morning.

Excellent description Great write5/5

Very good writing.

Well this one is a little more easy to comprehend, still has big words, i give this one a 5/5!!! keep it up!!!

I clicked on 1 of your poems and couldnt stop reading. i read and read all of them.there is something unique about your writing it might not be understood easily.Thats a great thing though cuz a good element is to make u think and your poems would make me wonder.Your poems opens a whole new world of poetry.

This is simple, and yet you still don't openly say what you are talking about, until the more obvious last two lines. You leave your poetry open for interpretation, that isn't always easy to do without completely confusing the reader. I like this poem, you use great words to describe everything and it really gets the reader feeling what you are talking about. Great write. 5/5

Tammie

"Her poison, "

OMFG i love that line. It can be used in so many ways.
Your poems are so short, but they are so meaningful. Very incredible. You have an incredible talent. Sooo much great and useful potential. You won't have any trouble finding a publisher.
5/5
~yellowfeverlime