The reason I thought this poem was different was because it seems implied the the final blank like that the trigger was pulled and gave a realisitc end to the poem instead of the dead saying they had died if that was what you were trying to do. It seemed written in a hasty style, which could mirror the speaker's anger. Also the brackets added a nice touch.

Wow! whoa! i love this poem..really really good job!

Wow, this is deep,
Take bullets for me--your feelings go unread
Whisper candy sweet words to him instead This poem is jealous rage,
Very good and scary5/5

I really enjoyed the way it just floated out! Excellent read. I can relate to valentines day situations and such... very good job, 5/5!! =)

I felt emotion from this one. 5/5. Great write!

I loved the style and wording you put in this poem. it was a nice read. emotion and everything flowed. i liked the alliterations and the bracket. that was a nice touch.

Wow this was a very interesting and different poem. I loved it. I think this is one of my favorite poems I have read in a while. I loved the repetition of "pull the tricky tigger". The style was very unique. It held my attention all the way through. I liked how you put the words in braccets that was a very nice touch. I will be reading some more of your poems. You did an excellent job on this one.

Keep writing!
Cayce

This could definately become lyrics. well written! 5/5

I'm seriously in awe at this...
It was beautifully written, the first line had me captivated and while I didn't want this to end, I wasn't disappointed when it did.
I liked the repetition, I thought it made the poem a lot more powerful, and the imagery you used was fantastic.
I think this just became my favourite of your's.

Wow.. I'm speechless haha.. This was just so amazing. It flowed wonderfully & I loved the structure of it. I think it was flawless.

You deffinitley have a way with words.
This touched me. I also really loved the title of it. Very catchy.

Awesome job. Keep it up.

Bri x

Wow, the way you told a story like that in such a nice way, the flow of the poem kept me reading the poem over and over again. great job.

I enjoyed this poem... It seems slightly sarcstic (hmm).

I think you have an excellent vocabulary. I don't really know what to say. Usually, i look for spelling err's in poems but i can't seem to find any errors.

5/5
~Stephen White

(oh well, congrats on the contest.)