Very nicely written, I loved it.

This line, "Be here; forever stay" I think would flow better if it went like this, "Be here; forever to stay"

Also this line, "From deep in my heart" I think would flow better if it went like this, "From deep within my heart"

Other than that it was beautifully written. Keep up the amazing work, you are very talented.

Peace, Joe

I miss you so much. i remember the night we wrote this together. i hope they will come back to us.

~~rikki tikki~~