Nature's Lessons

I think poems written about nature are some of my favorites. not as boring as some love poems can be. nice write and a nice flow of thoughts and expressions. peace.

"A tropical sun rising over a frozen landscape,
Emerging from behind the clouds
and laughing at the frigid frailty it sees covering the world,
Because it knows how much power it has over such cold beauty"

I like your personifaction you used about the sun laughing, nice touch. Also, great descriptions about the sun, brings me into this piece.

"A distant moon rising over a black-and-blue hinterland,
Smiling softly while ascending
and shaking its head at the tranquility of the night--
It knows that no such peace can last"

First line: Shouldn't "hinterland" be "winterland"?
First line: Beautiful imagery that really set the scene and gives me visuals in my mind while reading this.

"A tiny raindrop falling from an overcast sky,
Wailing like a newborn"

Perfect simile! I love your orginality and the way you worded certain things, not the same old, same old. Wonderful!

"An autumn leaf falling from a barren tree,
Looking down and seeing its descended brothers
who have already sacrificed themselves to save their maker--
He feels ashamed that he is the last to leave,
And begins to fall a little faster"

Okay, where can I begin? The way you grouped the sun, moon, rain, and leaf into separte stanzas was brilliant, and it was like reading four different poems emerged into one. Your words, to me, were exploding off the page, I certainly enjoyed this write, and you have a way to make your work, come alive to all who read upon it.

"Nature teaches so many lessons, if only one knows where to look"

A wise saying to end this piece, and it gives off a good message too. That above line is so true, and I am just falling in love with this piece more and more as I reread it. Beautiful, beautiful work, can't say anymore that hasn't been said. 5/5 from me, take care and keep writing always and forever....

I love how you made each aspect like one piece of a whole. the first two (about the sun and the moon) were like the 2 main things in life, the ones who control everything. and the second two (the rain drop and the leaf) were some of the smaller things, they belong in groups.
overall great poem, it makes you think

Good poem but not my favorite. The wording was good. The format was ok. I gave it a 5/5.

Once again you described the scenery very well with excellent imagery and word choice. Flow though could have been better and at times this piece seemed a bit similar to your "December" piece as it contained some of the same words. Try and remove any unneeded words like "and" to help create a better flow, the one in your first stanza really isn't needed. Great job again though another 4/5 GG23