Good, but filled with overused images...sorry.

Wow wow wow! vry good.. got a gr8 flow!
love it..
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Wow
this poem was short but it hit me and i thought u did a good job of expressing ur emotions
i think the repetition of the line this is all thats left of me at the end had a nice effect too
one suggestion. i think it would sound better if u said living out their final days instead of the final days
good job
5/5
=)