Now this is nicely done. This poem contains things I wouldn't have thought of even if I was thinking about it. Which happens quite often.

I loved the first stanza in particular, *that* is what I call proper modern poetry. It sounded like it's out of the works of the likes of Dhal, or Ted Hughes.

Very nice, very original. As far as understanding goes, i'm pretty sure I don't understand all of it. If I had to guess, I'd say "the line to the coaster" is a pretty significant thing in the poem, and if it's what i think it is, would have to admit i'm also "deathly afraid of the ride..."

Well done, keep it going!

This is excellent i loved the flow and overall the whole peace I liked the illusions you created they were wonderful great job 5/5
*kaila*

Different, but a nice flow...i enjoyed it greatly.

Unique and original poem, I'm kinda impressed( and it's hard for me to be impressed by reading a love poem). 5/5

Hmmm that was an intreating one... i had to read it a few times to make sense of it but it was really nicley written made me think

Very nice write! keep up the good work!
god bless

Wow!!!! i luv this poem it really speaks to me!

Lol! I really adore the first stanza.. I was like; LOL! XD It really makes you want to read the rest =] and the rest was good as well ^^ Keep up the good work. 5/5

Great job. love this poem. 5/5.

Great job. love this poem. 5/5.

Loved this poem:) nice jobbbbb!
<3 emma
ps 5/5

Loved this poem:) nice jobbbbb!
<3 emma
ps 5/5

That was a nice poem

Now I know your just meant to be a poet seriously i love this poems writing

It's really great good luck with your poems and take care