Blood Legion

This is deep! i got a vision in my head of this! amazing job! it flowed so wonderfuly! 5/5

~Kristina

Great poem, perhaps for a title "Blood Legion" idk just thinking any way great stuff here

"No one is safe
From death's powerful grasp
All come together
Like a necklace's clasp"

I'm not sure if I like that last similie, it doesn't really have the dark effect that the rest of the poem does, maybe thats something to look upon later and see if you can find a better alternative if you wish.
apart from that very good, you created a dark atmostphere well :) 4/5

I will think of a title, but for now, I can say that you did a very good job with this. It flows perfectly!