Well it's an intersting story too,and do that stanza thing on that too,trust me it will work,your poem are really good,and i just saw you're new here,so welcome honey

This was great. awesome sentence structure. full of emotion. Loved it

This one struck a chord with me because i loved how you used "the" as the subject name..
It was outstandingly thought out!
You should be proud
5/5
*gem*