A really sad story,i'm sorry for you,please don't worry yourself,keep it up

The not so good-
I walked away covered in and such
(huh? this makes no sense. o.o)
Of course it wasnt fun after he died
(eh boring. fun then fun. change the words up a bit., and wasn't)
Last few lines didn't rhyme. seeing-beating and tonight-knife.

but i did like this one alot@ it flowed really well and the message was clear.

good job. =]

x.o Lauren

Wow. That was violent. I hope that is just fiction. You had nice rhythm btw.

OH so much emotion, and so well put together.

Alot of emotion... I liked it. But this line, "I walked away covered in and such", doesn't really make sense lol.

marcella

The words to start off you use are not used often, great trait to have.

the poem was moving, very.

5/5 David

Ooh. very intruging! i loved it. so mysterious. it rocked
much love and many kisses,
bex

Great poem. You can do a little editing on the grammar of some lines. But overall it was really good. Keep it up 5/5