Wow great poem, i loved it, 5 from me, p.s if ya have time can you comment on some of mine

Scary, maybe you should go in the horror stories industry.

your servant:
david

I thought that this poem was great.. I like the way you showed how you were trapped within the grips of some unknown demon that will never let you out of his grasp.. Great poem..

Great work leads to great poem :)
"I can always feel it there,
never leaving.
Its presence lingering in the darkest place."
Love that one ^.^
Anyway, I read all of your poems, like the way you write, although you don't rhyme much. Especially liked "When will the world understand?", "Losing you" & "I had a dream" and I'm addin ya to my favourites :). When you'll have time, check mines pwease.
Much love, Br0k3n

Well they're definitly all interesting poems. Quite suicidal, but hey thats what being a teenagers all about!

Must stop hitting myself for my pure blind ignorance of everything.

See ya soon my dear

LF xxx