Comments : Waiting and Missing You

  • 20 years ago

    by Rachel

    aww be strong things will improve

  • 20 years ago

    by Kidpoetry

    OK...GREAT POEM once again. Here are my favorite lines....

    Just a simple little cuddle
    Would turn my world around
    Make me giddy with the utmost happiness
    Turn my frown upside down.

    Id swear you took that idea straight from my soul. Thats exactly wat i dream abt doin wit my baby every night...and its wat i crave the most to do when i can finally b wit her in person...face to face...God i cant wait no longer..and i know you understand that. Urgh! Well newaz...great poem....i loved it...as i do all of your poems...keep em comin...its somewat comfortin knowin im not alone in this blissful pain...

    -Seanny

  • 20 years ago

    by PnQ Mod Account

    Great Job, Michelle! Be sure to check out my poem, "Forever Times Two", very similar :)

    (btw, thanks for all your comments on my poems)

  • 20 years ago

    by craig

    Can fully relate to that first stanza you have written here michelle. that vacant feeling of being apart from the one you love, that incomplete fitful hankering that hangs over my life like an omnious black cloud from morning to night, only partialy satiated when we have our chats or phone calls. your use of nightime stars and the rising sun give a sense of time, of continous unfullfilled desires forever niggling at our peace of mind.
    yes it is very heartbraking to find someone special then to be denyed even there pressence, ever having to daydream about the moment we meet, that first exciting, nervous embrace. `love so real` so glad you see it the same way i do too. the real thing, totaly unmistakable when it finaly happens. at 34 i was begining to think of it as a myth but you have proved that theory wrong, and im so glad you have.
    The third stanza perfectly reflects the constant emotional flux the present situation brings, the bittersweet, cruel/joyful, wonderous/ tortuious merry-go-round were are currently spinning and reeling from. i tend to bless the fates as surely its better to have this than to not, but know exactly what you mean.
    `what is unknow is the timeframe` well 8wks or so baby and i will be with you. like you said with each passing night we are drawing closer and closer to the time when, for a few weeks at least we can find some peace in our hearts, jus thinking on that is giving me comfort at the moment. a thought i will cling to. `this infection...only each other for the cure` love the way you have described it there, couldnt have put it better. each of us the antitode to this disease we call love. brilliant poetry babe (again!)
    yes a simple cuddle will turn my frown upside down too (love the way you put it there), just the merest of touches would be like a drop of water touching my lips as i was crossing a brutal desert, a tiny morsel of relief from all this raw heat.
    yet again you save the best till last. you have no ideal how that concluding stanza makes my heart sing. knowing you are feeling exactly the same as me, and are prepared to wait and go all through these uneccesary problems brings a smile to my weary face. im gonna protest to the host, five isnt enough for this babe, yr poetry deserved a wider audience than jus one web site. verse like this should be in the homes of millions. if i had my way school children a hundred years from now would be taught your poetry, all being able to recite yr best work off by heart. you are blessed with a gift babe xxx

  • 20 years ago

    by robyn

    wow, i feel like you have stolen the words right out my mind... i feel that way about my boyfriend who lives a few states away, but soon we will be together without interuptions and will be able to live together the way we should..... beautiful