Revenge

by LockedInEternity   Feb 16, 2007


Igniting the fire,
of a pained and doubted heart.
A murder high in power,
with a sad, confusing start.

Pinpointing the location,
where it all came to begin.
Dishonoring her dignity,
turned out to be a sin.

So clever and wise,
the plot started to form.
The anger within her,
a thundering storm.

Luring her prey,
her thoughts spoken in lies.
Tying to cover,
her vengeful disguise.

With each step, such pleasure,
for she knew what came next.
Excitement revolved her,
her muscles it flexed.

Talking with her victim,
like everything was fine.
Waiting for the moment,
as she poured him more wine.

Overcoming tipsy,
her victim starts to sway.
Losing all his power,
as she pounces for the prey.

If any doubt starts to rise up,
she pushes it away.
Remembering the bruises,
thinking why she ever stayed.

Tying up his boundless limbs,
her bathtub filled up to the top.
Putting him in, she sits by him,
waiting while his breathing stops.

She giggles as he realizes,
that he is g.u.n.n.a die.
His neck chained to the bottom,
he loses breath with every try.

As she witnesses his torture,
her eyes light up the room.
Taking a mental picture,
of what he looked like at his doom.

She remembers what he'd say to her,
and how he'd make her cry.
" You mother f u c k i n g w h o r e"
"Get out you b i t c h, go die"

At last taking that golden ring,
she threw it far away.
Those pitiful, small cries he moaned,
were the last things that he'd say.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Oh wow. This was yet again a very great read. Thanks for sharing it with me. Such a deep poem, great flow, word choice is outstanding without a doubt.. Um, definatly had me from the beginning and throughout the entire poem til the end. You did a faboulous job again. I keep saying the same thing over and over. You are a true example of a great poet! Great work, keep blossoming as a writer :] 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Melpomene

    To me this piece was much better then the last I read. I loved the flow it didn't seem to stray what so ever throughout the entire thing. The first stanza was great it caught my attention and got me hooked. This poem seemed kind of like a chant to me because the flow was so smooth. Word choice interesting. Overall I enjoyed this one a 5/5~mel

  • 17 years ago

    by Startle Me

    First stanza?
    Wonderful.

    Dishonoring her dignity,
    turned out to be a sin.
    That didn't really flow that well.
    Seems pretty forced.
    Maybe you could change it into
    The dishonored dignity
    Turned out to be a sin

    [[Louring]] her prey,
    It's luring, dear.

    her muscles it flexed.
    That's a strange line.

    Like I said.
    I don't like the profanity in the ending.
    It's really... random to me.

    All in all, it was okay.
    Not the best, I've read.
    Also not the worst.
    4/5?

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    Revenge is indeed the sweetest of all emtions. I loved this poem it was truly amazing. Again I couldn't take my eyes off it, and the word choice was so great that its brillantancy can not be expressed in words alone. You really outdid your self this time. I mean it your words are great, your work is wondeful. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    Wow.
    Just scrolling back I can see the length of the poem but when reading it everything just blended in due to the great flow & ideas.

    "She giggles as he realizes,
    that he is g.u.n.n.a die.
    His neck chained to the bottom,
    he loses breath with every try."

    ^^ I loved that stanza because it showed she was human too, not just a physco*.

    Loved your chosen vocab and you really did an excellent job on this one.

    :]

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