This was good, i mean, it was great.
I liked the honesty within the poem, the courage at the end, and the imagery was good too.,
well done
love Tara-Kay

Hey hey. this is a great poem. i loved the way it all panned out. it was simply beautiful.

keep writting. i love your poems. clap clap

5/5 David

This poem flowed really well, I love the ending... excellent work Hun 5/5 xx

This is absolutely amazing. I love poems like this. Mostly because I can relate to them. You are such an awesome writer. Don't ever stop. Great work. :]

It was really good, I thought. But I also thought you could put a lot more into it. If you catch my drift.

[That's just what you like to do]
Suggestion: That's just what you like to always do.

^^This helps out the flow a lot more.

I found that in this piece, it had a really choppy flow in some places, but really flowy flow (grammar :P) in others. Personally, I think you just need to sit down in a nicee calm place, and write. That's it. There doesn't have to be all these poem techniques that you absolutely need to follow. If you really need to get something out, try writing freeverse. It's a lot easier, and it gets your emotions out just like a poem with 'rules.'

Now, on your words that rhymed, I thought you could have picked a few better rhymes than the ones that you did. These ones seemed like 2 second rhymes made up on the spot. And they all seem as if they were really easy and one syllable words, just simply chosen on the spot. If you're going to rhyme, be unique and different. Don't make them boring or dull. Try to add some spice to the piece. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha
PS: Sorry the comments are so late -.-

Beautiful work..i love this 1...mean i did'nt find anything al tht wrong wth the flow..n i loved the choice of words..n the ending was lovely.....
5/5!
Kp writing!
xxPoojaxx

I wasn't impressed, in all honesty. But it wasn't bad. I liked it enough to give it a 5.

Ravyn

Awe, this was pretty sad. I could definitely relate to it.

"That's just what you like to always do" - I thought that this line sort of messes up the flow in the first stanza. Maybe it would work better if you took out a word, so it read like: "That's just what you like to do" OR "That's just what you always do".

Overall, though, the flow was good and it was an enjoyable read. Another type though - use punctuation. It helps the readers know when to stop, so it doesn't just feel like we're reading one long stanza. :)