by amoxi Feb 17, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
about death
My scars began forming when i was one |
Hm.. I can understand the message in this poem however some of the rhymes are a little forced.. and Runny doesnt really make much sence. However I did like how you described the stages of your childhood that was very interesting. Just try and remember thought that no matter how much pain you go through now it will only make you stronger. |
At some points here I felt the rhyming was forced, for example: |
This is so sad. I loved the emotion and the words. You did a great job on this one. Ur a very good writter. Keep it up. 5/5 |
by Dee
I liked the idea of this poem alot. i like the story and i particually liked a few of the rhymes. it could have flowed a little better, but it was nice |
Wow that was really good!! i wish my poems would just flow that easily! |