Wow, thets friggin amazing, seriously, wow....

This is a deep poem full of raw emotion i liked your extended metaphor of scars, it was very effective, well done

Alright. well the rhymes scheme isnt so amazing. especially since you used the same word to rhyme with it...
o.o(man and man)
and then it died.. the rhyme scheme dissapeared!

Your language also wasnt amazing. many words were mediocre. also you had some spelling/grammar issues..

But to tell the truth i liked it. the metaphors were cool and it oddly flowed well.

4/5

xLauren

Wow...amazing...just work on ur grammar and you'll do good!!!

Wow. the wording could be fixed, other than that it was strong and nicely written.

This is a really nice poem!
very well pened...
its so sad! you really put alot of emotions in this one! keep it up!

So sad story,you have really good imaginery,and i agree there are some grammar mistakes,but other than that,well done

The rhymes were very well done, I liked how you didn't exactly write what the man did to you but it was implied. 5/5

I think its a very good poem. There are quite a few spelling errors, always spell check. Very sad, .torn families.

Hey, I liekd the sttory thats told in this poem. It has real emotion, and is so very sad. The flow and rhythem was okish. I really loved the enotion and meaning in the poem, that was easily the best thing about it. I liekd the metaphor and the vocabulary used. To improve i think you should of used punctuation more. Bu tother then that i wuite enjoyed it! Keep writing! xx

I liked the idea behind this poem.
There's a couple spelling errors that need fixing, and I thought in places the flow was a little off.
But apart from that, you did a wonderful job, and I really enjoyed the imagery.

I liked this. The idea was really good. & It was pretty well thought out.

But, there is a few spelling mistakes. Where some 'The's' should be 'It's' and stuff.

Also, remember to capitalize your 'i's :]

Other than that.. I liked it.

Good job. Keep it up.

Bri x

Great use of metaphors! The poem as a whole is good. I think if you fixed some of the grammatical errors it would be a great poem. 5/5

marcella

For just coming off the top of your head its pritty good....your very creative..i'm really enjoing your writing

Wow this is a very deep poem, filled with so much emotion and hurt. i really like it. it flowed very nicely. and i loved the rhymes in it! 5/5

~Kristina

I love the last verse,
"The gushed out for a long time
I thought to myself what a refreshing crime
Soon there was no left to bleed
I closed my eyes and i was finally freed"

it was amazing, like all your other poems. well done bub
much love and many kisses,
bex

Wow that was really good!! i wish my poems would just flow that easily!

I liked the idea of this poem alot. i like the story and i particually liked a few of the rhymes. it could have flowed a little better, but it was nice

This is so sad. I loved the emotion and the words. You did a great job on this one. Ur a very good writter. Keep it up. 5/5

At some points here I felt the rhyming was forced, for example:

"I thought about so many times its not funny
So when i was 16 the fifth scare came and it was extra runny"

'Runny'? That just doesn't make sense. I did, however, really enjoy this poem. I liked how you seperated all your 'scars' from one another, and sort of told a story behind each one.

Nicely penned.