The Allurement Of The Knife

A different type of poem from most that I've read but it still has a powerful emotion; and overall it's a great write. 5/5.

I wrote a new poem with more punctuation. See if it improves my writing. I love the input.

Wow thats one of the best poems i have written, it says so much and i wish others understood more about self harm. its very good well done x x x x im always here hunni x x x

Ooh. you should totally use your name as the last line of the poem. it ends it better. well thats what i think.

i liked it.

Wow it was so real i know exactly where u were going with it for ive been through that stage there was so much feel to this poem it was beautifully written i loved it 5/5

It was a different format to most cutting poems, I like the simplicity because it portrays it so blatently obvious.
Hmm I think you could do a bit more on the creative vocabulary front..."red" is an example....
Also tears and heart beat are rather over used ideas....
The beat and sound of "tears appear" though was quite good.
The three middle couplets were my favourite part of the poem. Subtle yet effective.
Maybe a cliche subject, but I've read much much worse. It was actually a good read.