Good job! Keep up your writing! Take care Cindy

Wow! how awesome. so simple & beautiful. full of defeat. so sad. i think this is the most powerful, short poem i've read. i had it invisioned from the perspective of the sky. seeing all the patches. then the tiny speck that is the worker. sky like a brass-golden dawn. i really think this is freakin' spectacular. so sorrowful with a tinge of 'maybe he won't give up just yet', but deep down you know any attempt would be futile. i could go on... welcome to the top of my favorites list. 5 for you. -beav

That was awesome. the word choice was simple yet effective, the emotion was clear, the message was strong, nicely penned. I must say I like your style. It is diffrent and quite refreshing 5/5