For dad

Short felt it could've been a little longer, again use puncuation it makes the poem that much better. Great write.

Second line first stanza, "couldve" should have an apostraphy so it reads, "could've"

Last line first stanza and last line second stanza, "lye" should be, "lie"

Fourth stanza second line, "your" should be, "you're"

Peace, Joe

Thats an amazing poem, its so full of emotion, I'm so sorry about your father....keep on writing, isn't it a great way to vent?....:/ well I really liked this poem and I can only imagine how you must feel....

Amazing job, like i said before i'm so sorry about your father.

keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

This is very sad and full of emotion its short but it seemed like it told a novel

You're 14?? Your writing syle is very mature!
I'm sorry you lost your dad. I can tell that it's very painful.
I don't think the pain will ever go away but I think you'll find ways to handle it.