"dang" > pfft, how american, LOL =]
And maybe on the last stanza you could move the ellipsis to like, make it more hard hitting?
"Is killing...me"
[...is killing me]
[Is killing me...]

But other than that, I like it. Short and to the point.
If it's true, I'm really sorry =[
5/5
~FountainsOfBlood