Portrayal of my Past (acrostic)

by Hatori   Feb 19, 2007


Perhaps I shouldn't have intervened,
Or tried to make it stop.
Re-thinking what had occurred,
Troubles me every evening.
Remembering the vision,
And examining the angles,
Yearning for it to stop.
All I ask is to be released from this horrid memory.
Leave me be, I beg of you, please.

Others grieve,
For I no longer exist.

My fate was decided,
Years in the past.

Perhaps I should have run away,
And let her die,
Siting there,
Tears falling from her eyes.

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Acrostic: a series of lines or verses in which the first, last, or other particular letters when taken in order spell out a word, phrase, etc.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Brad Quammen

    This was well written indeed. It's poems such as this that make poetry great. You have talent. Not everyone can write like this. 5/5 without a doubt.

  • 17 years ago

    by Victoria Rainey

    Again.. very deep and yet so powerful .. it touches me every whim.. I love it becasue I was able to feel the feeing sthat you feel I was able to read and picture the evnt that was occuring in that poem.. thankyou for makng me think twice about everythng.. and think even deeper. good job and keep up with your amzing work 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Broken Inside He only wants to hurt me

    This is nice the flow and structure is really good. keep it up. you have a great gift for poetry.5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I love acrostics
    =]
    And this one was very well written.
    One thing though,
    In the line...
    "Siting there,"
    "Siting" should be spelt "Sitting"
    Other than that, this was perfect,
    I really enjoyed reading this.
    And the title was also very good.
    Great job, Dear.
    5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    This was good especially for the structure that you chose. "And examining the angles" this was my favorite line so powerful and unique. Nice write.

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