Wow. beautifully sad poem. what made you write it?

there were a few things you couldve fixed in this.

"I got up and get dressed and was ready to go." it should say GOT DRESSED.

you should keep a constant rhyming scheme too.

overall 5/5.

Wow really so shocked of the structure,it is so interesting,i even heard that creams when i got it a story in my head as i was reading that,really good work

Gr8 poem really liked it!!!

5/5

God bless u

Ya i remember that day as well... when i turned on the TV and i tought it was a movie... it was a very terrible day! very sad!

I love it..its so sad though..but 9/11 was...
<3 Katie

Ahh this is different from your other poems and I have to say that I like it the best, I like how you added the bit of peacefulness at the start with the mans wife, it makes him seem very human and likeable 5/5

Amazing this poem, so heroic and brave. Very vivid content and nicely written. Best Wishes.

An excellent poem about a tragic incident. 9/11. A day when many people died, yet i really like the fact that you told this story was kinda told not abouyt the vitems but about the heros. The survivors and the helpers. I raelly liked it. It had great rhyming, and a great flow and rhythem. The structure was good, thought i disliked the fact that every line ended with a full stop. But other then that a greeat poem, about a very sad say. So i really enjoyed it! Keep writng! xx

I really liked your topic, and your overall content. It was a saddening day and you captured the feeling and essence it had. But, it had no consistant flow. Some stanzas had it, others did not. I noticed that half-way through the poem you started changing your rhyming scheme. I think if you are to have one, it should be consistant. Some of them didn't have a rhyme scheme at all and then you played it up and changed it all throughout the poem. I think if you worked on your rhyme schemes, and not make each line sound so choppy sometimes, it could flow and sound magnificent. I really liked the poem, kudos.

Oh wow, I have tears in my eyes.
This was beautifully written, the imagery and wording were fantastic, and the whole piece flowed very well.
You managed to turn such a tragic thing into a beautiful write.
Excellent write.

Wow. This is so sad, but so beautifully written. I loved the topic of it. I could picture & hear everything as I was reading this poem. It brought tears to my eyes. You captured this tragic even so very well. Amazing job. Keep it up, Hun.

Bri.x

Aww.. this is soo cute.. wonderful write.. truely amazing.. filled with emotion and poetic.. great work

Wow..omg !!!! i love this poem....its so sad but i love the ending...very good job....ur a very talented writer.

Great poem, ive never read one on this topic, it flowed and rhymed perfectly, I give it a 5/5

Great poem, you took a sad day and turned it into a great poem, if you work in your rhymes it would be even better.

Omg very nice!, Love it!, 5/5 very well writen, and very sad story,I remember the day I woke up and saw that on TV,

Finaly found another one that writes a story.. I love this kind of poetry the most. This was very well writen and the story was very cool. Hopefully I will find more of this on this site and I'm putting you into favourites for this one =D

Keep this up =D

Aww this is really said, but greatly written. i love the long stanza's. excellent job on writing such a wonderful poem! again the rhyming was great! 5/5

~Kristina

:'( AWW!! this was amazing. i loved it. well done huni
much love and many kisses,
bex

Oh well done on this poem. i read it, and was like oh this is a tribute to all that helped on the day.

5/5 def! David