Loved it well done huni x

''So fall in love and pray it's true,
Wish upon a shooting star,
That your heart never breaks in two,
Because you can never hide the scar. ''

I loved that stanza most, I thought it was beautiful.
The imagery in here was wonderful, as was the wording.
I thought the whole piece flowed very well and you did a great job, as always.

The bad thing about a healing heart...it can heal, but the scar tissue that develops makes it less compliant and less resistant to future trauma. I wonder if that is true for the metaphorical heart as well...since you have put into words a feeling I have felt so many times, I would venture to say it is true.

- I used to love with my entire heart,
Now I give a lot, but never my all,
So when the relationship tears apart,
I will have broken my own fall -

I used to dive in kamikazi style...not so much anymore.

Awesome poem.

Wow. I loved this. The wording was excellent. You are a talented writer [as I have said before] and your work gets better as I read each new poem! wonderful write! 5/5

So fall in love and pray it's true,
Wish upon a shooting star,
That your heart never breaks in two,
Because you can never hide the scar.

How true this is and I'm sure many of us have been there. Great poem.

Aww this is so cute!! I loved the last stanza it was beautiful! 5/5
*kaila*

I can definitley relate to this poem... I think you could use a stronger vocab & this would be a amazing. Still a wonderful read. 5/5

marcella

I love how it flows and i can relate to this poem it was very well put together nice job 5/5

Wow i love this poem. . .It carries a true meaning. . . I love the way you can rhyme so much yet to me it never seems forced or unnatural. . .Often through the fight to keep a poem rhyming the message is lost. . .But it was not here

loved it
laura
x

Another SPECTACULAR write..!!! :) again you describe everything so well ... i didnt love the last stanza but the rest were just abosolutey amazing... you have a way with words :D

OMG THAT WAS SOO GOOD I REALLY LIKED IT SOOOOOOOO MUCH KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK...

I love it!! 5/5

Another great poem that spoke to me-5/5

That is a really great poe, it is so true! never get to in love cuz something badd might happen! i can relate...5/5

xoxo kisses

I saw your title and what can I say, I was intrigued :)

Check my critique out:

"Nothing that anyone says or does,
Will ease the crippling pain,
Your heart will never be what it was,
Never completely whole again."

^Your rhyme in this stanza is not really a rhyme. I know what you were going for, but it doesn't rhyme unless you say again differently than I do. :)

"That the risk can ignored."

^I have a feeling you're missing a "be".

I love the meaning behind this poem. I can most definately relate.

So my heart doesn't end up destroyed,
Because I know exactly how it feels.

That line hit home forsure man, this was awesome and completely true. It's unfortunate but, I think you hit the nail on the head with this.
5

Wow.. your poems flow so flawlessly that it seems like writing these poems just comes so easy for you.. once again excellent job.. and this poem cannot be any truer.. like they say.. u cant let someone be your everything, becuse when they're gone, you have nothing. You really layed it out in this poem. Nice job once again. =]

Take a bow, for you are truly one of the best. I love all of your poems, the vocab here is of course grand, the flow is perhaps perfect, and the word chose is brillant dripping with such strong emtion, wow you have talent.again keep writting, for my soul would be at a tragic loss without these written words.

Beautiful imagery. I love the rhyming and word choice.

So fall in love and pray it's true,
Wish upon a shooting star,
That your heart never breaks in two,
Because you can never hide the scar.

My favorite stanza, so descriptive. Another wonderful piece.

Good poem