Good job it flowed together nicley. keep up the great work
5/5

Wow this poem is sad!=[ but it is still very good writing! i love it. keep uo the good work. i gave this poem a 5.

Great pome keep up the good work
5/5

A profound piece with a strong message. Nicely structured and good use of rhyme. Try extending the sentences; it will turn out to read more effectively. Well done :)