All I've Held On To

by BrixGoesxRawr   Feb 19, 2007


Falling farther, fading into the darkness
I can see you; you're there
But I can no longer feel you
As you slip further away from me

Trying to hold on to you as best I can
Screaming, crying out to you
Feelings fade into the wind
One heart now becomes two

Holding on as tight as I can
I'm not ready to let go of you
Slipping like silk through my fingers
Letting go, one finger at a time

Tears cascading down like rain
As the last finger slips
I guess it's just that time
To let go of all I've held on to

Brianna Carter
February 19, 2007.

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  • 17 years ago

    by amoxi

    This poem wasnt as good as the first one i read but it was alright if you changed a few phrases it might sound better and have a better flow 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by in.need.of.a.lucky.charm

    Wow! i loved this. it was powerful! i really liked these lines,
    "Slipping like silk through my fingers
    Letting go, one finger at a time"
    It was beautiful! keep it up hun.
    Much love and many kisses,
    Bex

  • 17 years ago

    by Dark Demise

    Not bad, I like it, Some words I might switch up a bit but over all good poem, keep it up,=)

  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    I think this poem starts out amazing.. truely spectacular word choice.. however the last two lines dont fit.. the whole poem is adjectives your describing your emotions so well and then in the end.. the words are so simple and unpoetic..

  • 17 years ago

    by amoxi

    Wow this poem was great its sad that she has to let go of everything that shes tried to hold on to, loseing control is never fun you're a great writer keep it up 5/5

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