Down the Lane

Wow.
I basically am left speechless.
This is the greatest poem I have read in a while. It flows beautifully, like a calm river.

I especially loved the first stanza --
"Whisper heart and feelings
as though sorrow left no stain
Swallow sand past fingers
Crushed petals beneath white rain"

I like this, it invokes the image of fleeting seasons and random emotions entangled in the flow.
great job.

Great word choice the flow was amazing great poem!!

My only suggestion would be to switch beautiful and young in your final sentence. I think it might flow a bit better but that's just me. Otherwise I rarely enjoy life poems but this one had so much visual images in it, some much to be felt, so much to be heard, I was drawn to every word until the poem came to its close.

This is beautifully written. It's so descriptive, which made it very enjoyable to read. Not to mention you kept a nice flow. I also liked the fact it I wasn't reading something I felt like I just read, if you know what I mean. 5/5

marcella