Wow. this is beautiful. nice visual work here. i really enjoyed this one. i love the image of 'down the lane'. very nice. 5 for you!

That was really beautiful, very inspiriational....very well put together, keep up the good work...5/5

This is beautifully written. It's so descriptive, which made it very enjoyable to read. Not to mention you kept a nice flow. I also liked the fact it I wasn't reading something I felt like I just read, if you know what I mean. 5/5

marcella

My only suggestion would be to switch beautiful and young in your final sentence. I think it might flow a bit better but that's just me. Otherwise I rarely enjoy life poems but this one had so much visual images in it, some much to be felt, so much to be heard, I was drawn to every word until the poem came to its close.

Great word choice the flow was amazing great poem!!

I like this, it invokes the image of fleeting seasons and random emotions entangled in the flow.
great job.

Wow.
I basically am left speechless.
This is the greatest poem I have read in a while. It flows beautifully, like a calm river.

I especially loved the first stanza --
"Whisper heart and feelings
as though sorrow left no stain
Swallow sand past fingers
Crushed petals beneath white rain"