Haha.. great begining bad ending. but still nice... i like my meat medium rare. but still there's always mad cow you godda worry about. xD
it really went downhill from the top. but please keep writing. dont stop. with a little more practice you'll be great.

anywhooo. it was.... you made it sound like she loved her mother. good. but... you also made it sound like she was gonna kill her dad... which she didn't . twist ending or whatever. if done corectly good. but in this case. you ruined the story. and wrecked the flow. not good.

You're cracked confused! This is such a great poem! I love the twist! Keep on writing!

You're cracked confused! This is such a great poem! I love the twist! Keep on writing!