This was an excellent write. Has a good rhythm, and conveys emotion.

"Well I'm sorry that I crossed the line..
When I let my heart believe that you were mine.
As I let temptation play it's role..
As I watched it spiral out of control."

^My favorite stanza. Keep up the good work.

Wonderful It would make an amazing song! I was practically singing it as I read it, actually.
I love the passion, or perhaps lackthereof, that I felt here. Almost a detached, yet cravingly attached feeling.
Loverly!

Well written and it does make a great song i sang it out loud as i read it and i read it to my best friend she loves it i like your style keep it up

:(...i can relate...it was extremelly good...i loved it...good job...

*sigh*

diviiinnneee.

<3 great work.

That was so beautiful! The flow was great. & Nothing seemed forced at all. I really liked this. The word choice was really good. & the vocabulary was amazing.

Beautiful.

Bri x