Very very dark, I like it. Though your second line sounded forced.. and right here:

"Maybe you'll love me when im dead."

You sould put I am* it just flows better... but other than that, and some grammer errors it was great :) the imagination was great, the flow was alright same with the rhymes. Count your syllables it helps they should be around the same number (ex: 6 7 8)

Wonderful Write

5/5

Normally I don't like sucidial poems, but loved the flow and rhyme of this one. It was well written. My only suggestion is to break it up into stanzas to add some more punch and sense of seperation. Well done. 5/5

That was sad. I'm personally not keen on cutting poems, but that said, this was very emotional and with out a doubt touching.
Thanks for sharing.

Omg this was really sad i loved it

Awesome job. i loved it. it was so sad and dark. keep up the good work. 5^5.

This is really sad... but you wrote it beautifully. though some of the rhymes seemed a little forced. 5/5

marcella

I loved it! it was so sad your greaT! and very talented!
p.s. thanks for commenting mine

So sad=[ but amazingly amazing writing! =]

Dam that was good..could yet again feel the pain in which the poem was written. love sam

The best poem I've read so far. It's touching and deep. Very poetic. And the rhyming makes it really stand out. Awesome poem!

Love 4eva,
Chyann

Already commented on this one...still think the same thing; still not keen on cutting poems. :)

A bit cliche but I can relate to the pain

This was great!
The only thing I didn't like was the line ''When I'm dead'' it seemed to throw the flow a little.
Maybe try When I am dead?
Apart from that great work!

This poem was...i dont know. all your peotry is amazing. this poem was very easy for me to relate to. i used to cut. and i am often suicidal. the flow of this was beautiful and you painted a perfect picture in the readers mind. it was...(insert positive adj here)
--TheGothicAlbino

ps love the refrence to three days grace

OMG I love it! It's so deep and full of emotion! 5/5! XD

Well... This poem is written excellently and topic is great, but I don't like last line.
"Thanks for throwing me in hell" are the words written in crimson red,
"Maybe you'll love me when im dead."
^This lines are poor. They don't make any scene to me.
Rest of this poem is incredible. 5/5

Very dark.Awesome flow and I loved the word choice. You're a great writer but heck you don't need me to tell you that. Oh and I LOVE THREE DAYS GRACE!*lol*

<3Amber

Wow!That was intense!The flow was nearly flawless and I could feel your pain.The visual you painted was great.5/5

<3Amber

I love three days grace..
this is very good your emotion was felt so srtongly and i loved reading it.
another great job!
5/5
laura

This was a great poem, I liked how it set to modern times, and you added the touch of a band that sand about pain. You did great, adding more interest for the readers. Your flow was a bit off on this one, but it didn't distract much on how great you did. I loved the words you chose, great job!