Awwww this is so sad....really good poem!

5/5

~Michelle~

I feel for the teenager. i wanted to just shout and say you can stay at our place! (if my parents say its ok)

i loved it. it was a great story poem i love these the most!

5/5 David

Your poem really made me feel for the girl, which I like. I truly felt sorry for her. A strong story of heartache was conveyed here.

Keep it up.

Well written and good usage of emotions. hard hitting and straight forward. alot of people can some how relate to longing for a "home". not always in the convienal sense but in a mental sort of way. like a home is where you make it/where the heart is. good work. (:

You wrpte a reality from our world..there are millions of girls in the street like her...so we're really the luck ones..you described that feelings so good
Well done
Take care
LAURA

Aww this is really sad, but very deep. you did a great job writing it. it flowed really nicely. 5/5

~Kristina

Sad.. but beautiful :) I feel sorry for the girl in the poem..

Another touching poem!! So sad..