To be honest with you when I first went to read your poem I was just like 'okay I'll get this over with then go to bed' HAHA but then I started reading and your words just CAPTIVATED me!
I know the feeling... those memories that used to be so wonderful just turn bitter and painful when it's over.
This is one one of my favourite poems because it's really well written and I feel I can relate to it.

This was so sad and heartfelt. The flow was just great, very well written.

OH MY GOODNESS. lol, great job kid :] i really liked this poem. it sooo good. i have no complaints. :] keep it up

Wow excellent work I love your stuff

Wow very sad but I could feel a sence of love still in this poem.. When I first saw the title I thought that it was going to be a love poem about someone at war or something but I was off. I loved how instead of focusing on describing the memories you went a different path that not to many poets go down. Nice work and very different I liked it.

Its very welll written i like the different words you use and it is full of emotion 5/5

Wow that was great. The words were so meaningfull 5/5 great job, keep it up.

Excellent! really nicely written. i relate- when i'm struck by memories of my dad. ya' done good! very rich. great rhyming scheme! you rock! -beav

We all have memories of somebody we loved dearly and they'll always be with us. i loved the poem it was fantasticly written and it flowed very well amazing job 5/5

WOW.
Amazing, i loved how you explained them taking over you and then at the end said what they were. amazing great rhymes and rhythem and flow.
just beautiful.

Awwwwwwwwwwwww...... i realy understood this poem gr8 wrk take care

Wow I love this poem! Your an amazing writer. I really liked the very last stanza, that reminded me of all the people i have lost adn just how it felt. Great work. 5~
~bianca~

Very good.

Oh, my gosh. I don't know what to say.
Wow?
Uhm... no. That's too fragile
I want a stronger word.
And I'll find one and tell you about it.
Anywayz, I love this part.
Erasing laughs and leaving voids
They come and suck life out of me
Excruciating; all the pain
I'm giving in so desperately
It's so darn sad.
Hit me up, okay?
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WOW! This poem had a powerful punch to it's flow and rhyme. It just screamed itself off the page like a steady drumbeat or a pounding rain. This is one of the best I've read in a while. Amazing piece. Definitely a five!
GREAT JOB!
Charisma*

Amazing poem! i love it!

Aww, this was brilliant. flow and rhyming were both really good, nothing sounded forced. well done hun.
much love and many kisses,
bex

Beautifully tragic.
By this I mean it was beautifully written yet you kept a daunting horrific flow about this poem.
Your vocab was well used, rhythm was flawless and I don't think you need me to tell you these things but i will anyway!

You got it down just dont let it go.

Talent girl
5.5

Have you ever seen that lifetime poem Speek? This poem reminded me of that girl, in almost every way.
You did a great job with this poem, the emotion, flow, description and rhyming was almost perfect. I disliked " knife " and "strife" rhyming, but there's not much you can rhyme with either of them. so, yeah.

"Dodging bullets through my heart
This world is out of reach
My feet in puddles, bandaged heart
My life's now theirs to keep"
^ I loved that stanza especiallyt he last two lines.

Keep it up.
<3 Teria.

I enjoyed this poem alot, i found it to be interesting capturing touching and flowed really nicely. Your word choice was amazing for this poem i feel you expressed so much throughout the entire thing. The flow was remarkable. Truely an amazingly written poem with so much depth. Well done loved it~mel