Everything about this is excellent. The flow, the vocab, creating great imagery and expressing the emotion so well, as well as good rhyming, and to wrap it up a wonderful ending to pull it all together. I love that you only mentioned the memories at the end, it worked out really well. Good job. =] 5/5

Tammie

"Dodging bullets through my heart
This world is out of reach
My feet in puddles, bandaged heart
My life's now theirs to keep"
^^Lovely line..perfect....beautiful
Very very touching n excellent choice of words...n this peice flowed like water...perfect..=)
Good job!

xxPoojaxx

Beautiful poem. great job!

This was so sad.
i love it.

Dodging bullets through my heart
This world is out of reach
My feet in puddles, bandaged heart
My life's now theirs to keep

Trapped by them and lost in them
A room without a door
No way out, there's no escape
Each time's worse than before

Erasing laughs and leaving voids
They come and suck life out of me
Excruciating; all the pain
I'm giving in so desperately

this stanza has a strong meaning.
the imagery was perfect and the flow was good.
take care.
emmeline

Dear this is a good poem. Iliked the word chooice and your descriptions. still there is room for improvement like making it more rhyming, yeah you have managed to keep the rhymes to some extent. Keep up the good work. Tc

WOW I FEEL YOUR PAIN THROUGH YOUR POEM AND THAT IS WAT I LOVE MOST ABOUT IT ITS SAD AND FILLED WITH PAIN BUT I LOVE IT GREAT JOB

Great job, it was so heart felt and sad. i loved the way you used your words, as they just melt together, 5/5