The rhyming was a liittle off, unless you meant it to be that way, but it was a nice poem. Good flow. 5/5

marcella

Mmm i noticed too that the rhyming was funny. . . Its not that it was wrong but you knida got into a rhythm and then it changed. .
This poem is obviously packed with emotions and thats how they are supposed to be so screw the rhyming. . .
Lovely overall i enjoyed the read

laura
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Ok poem, but it seems that it is too forced. It would flow better were the second line a sylable shorter. The over all meaning is well expressed, and i think it was a good but unoriginal topic.
Good job
~yellowfeverlime

Nice poem