Heh heh heh... too true! Do you need a comma in the second line?

Well you have the structure right, but only ever having done a handful of cinquains myself, i'm hardly one to talk, lol.
I enjoyed it, it said a lot with so little and i think a lot of people can relate to it as well, i know i can, lol
5/5
*Gem*

Wow that was a strong message. maybe its true. mans creation will destroy their own creator. believable. loved it..short simple and cute, with great message.
nuff luv x