Unbreak My Heart

by aDORKable x3   Feb 26, 2007


I want to tell you not to go,
That I need you by my side.
I want to tell you that if you left,
A part of my would die.

I want to tell you things,
I could never speak before.
I want to tell you to listen to me,
But you just choose to ignore.

I wanted to tell you so many times,
But to you, everything seems to go unheard.
I want to tell you how much I care,
But to you, I'm speaking usless words.

I want to tell you not to leave,
But I can see that it was touble from the start.
So now as I watch you walk away,
I whisper, "Unbreak My Heart."

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  • 17 years ago

    by BECCA lessTHANthree

    COMMENT # 2

    wow.. i LOVE this poem... the word choice is wonderful... beautiffully expressed emotion .. however in this line "A part of my would die." i think you meant [me] not "my"

  • 17 years ago

    by BrixGoesxRawr

    Aw. This is so sad. But, so very beautifully written. It flowed really really well & nothing seemed force. It was very descriptive, as well. It was so deep & powerful. Really touched my heart.

    Spelling mistakes:

    A part of my would die [my should be 'me'].

    But I can see that it was touble from the start. [touble should be 'trouble'].

    Favorite stanza:

    I want to tell you not to leave,
    But I can see that it was touble from the start.
    So now as I watch you walk away,
    I whisper, "Unbreak My Heart."

    ^ This was just so captivating. Ah. I can't even explain it. I loved these lines. The very last line.. absolutely amazing!!

    Beautifully penned, babe.

    Bri x

  • 17 years ago

    by shyaners

    Gosh I really really like it. It fits my situation right now. Good work :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Kristina

    This is really good! you did a great job writing this poem! 5/5

    ~Kristina

  • 17 years ago

    by Jade

    Very good!! xx

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