Wow Hatori! I really liked the phrase:

"That day when I met you,
And knew that I couldn't,
That I couldn't love you,
Not even if I truly did."

I melted into pieces when I read this. You are truly romantic and sad.

I agree just the flow was problem here but other than that amazing
and an advice,just don't repeat what you said into the new line more thyan once you know what i mean
Other than that you have a talent,don't give up
Have a nice day hun
Laura

"I used to know myself,
From head to toe,
But now all I can do,
Is try to make sense,
Of this harsh, complicated world."

That stanza sums everything up for me.
Love can make you lose track of everything!
5.5
*Gem*

And another good poem of yours, amazing. The title really got me interested, nice work.

Wow this was so sweet.. I agree with Wallace the title was beautiful and the poem was just as good.. you know its love when you'd rather give up the person you love than cause them any pain but just remember if they love you back that giving them up could hurt them more than you can even imagine. nice work.

"That day when I met you,
And knew that I couldn't,
That I couldn't love you,
Not even if I truly did."

I adore that stanza...it was so beautifully written.
Emotion and depth scream out from beyond the words in this piece...you did a wonderful job on such a sad poem.

Awww.. so .... srry I cannot find the word for it lol .. but from this poem.. I feel emptiness.. you need something.. but that is something for me to say and for you to figure out .. to become a poet than you already are.. good job and keep up the work

I like the first and the third stanzas of this poem the most. They're really effective and greatly written. The rest of it isn't bad but it could be even better. It is very emotional but you could make more powerful atmosphere with some metaphors.