by Erin Feb 27, 2007
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
Love, Infatuation, |
by Vegetable
Wow! I wish I could write like you when I was thirteen (which was only two years ago-but they were nothing close to what you are writing!) Only a few things: in the 6th line, you spelled "Genius" wrong, but that's really little. Also the poem's rhyme started to loose steam towards the end. Some of the rhymes in the beginning were really clever, but then they got a little predictable. Such as "Miss" and "kiss". But again, that's also very fixable, and other than that it was great. |
by Dark Demise
Love it, Great choice of words as always =) keep it up! |