by shadows poet Feb 27, 2007
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
Will i be there when you call me |
by Fredy
You should add a little more, it has a good idea and it's going in the right line, i know you could do better. |
For a short poem, it was fairly good so i gave it a 4. i think it should be a couple lines longer for the reader to get a little more from it. but thats just my preferance. =] good jobb. |