I really like the topic you wrote about, everything about it was so true. I agree with everything you said. The flow and rhyme were both very good. This had a very good meaning in it. Great job! I really loved it!

"My time is near I feel I have been bleed dry"
^^bleed should be bled

Keep writing!
Cayce

Excellent job on writing this. it flowed nicely. i enjoyed reading it. 5/5

~Kristina

Wow. i liked this depth and flow and rhyming. nice job. my favorite stanza:

have drank divine blood and called it wine
My humble cup has held the fruit of the vine
My soul was freed when my mind forgot
About my cup and all the pain it has brought